Distracting POV’s and Assumptions

I love movies. I love losing myself in the perils of the characters’ lives. I’ve often suggested that novel writers learn scriptwriting. In a different format, writers can better see the weakness in their stories.  You can learn a lot about writing by watching movies too. Especially what can ruin your plot. These are the same things that pull people out of a novel as well.

We went to see two movies last night; LESS THAN 30 MINUTES, and FRIGHTNIGHT. The first movie is an original, the second, a remake from the eighties. Both had problems that pulled me from the story (the first more than the second) and could easily be fixed.

Movie One: Less Than 30 Minutes (Distracting POV’s)

Plot: A slacker ends up with a bomb strapped to his chest, and ordered by the bombers to rob a bank.

Good plot. The trailers alone indicated it was a comedy and the performance of Jesse Eisenberg (The Social Network, Zombieland) and Aziz Ansari (Parks and Recreation ) didn’t feel forced. The big problem in this movie was the secondary POV. For some reason, the writers included several scenes from the bombers view. Their lives, why they wanted to strap a bomb to some poor soul; it was un-necessary. If anything, the crude dialogue and flat, stereo-typical characters ruined the rest of the movie. I had no interest in characters that think they deserve millions of dollars for no reason. You want character you can sympathize with.  Even if the father was a harsh sonofabitch, their motive was weak, and showing this side ruined the comedic tension of the other characters. It’s also worth to note that the crude and disgusting constant reference to oral sex from the secondary characters was not funny. This movie was rated 14A and my thirteen-year-old HATED those scenes.    

Movie Two: Frightnight (Assumptions from the writer)

Plot: A campy tale of a young teen who learns a vampire has moves into the neighbourhood and starts eating the neighbours. 

I like the original. It reminds me of LOST BOYS. Campy, but gross. They kept close to the original, which is why I think this movie works. Well, having Colin Ferral (Daredevil, Minority Report) as the vampire, and David Tennant (Dr. Who, Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire) helped too. The only problem I saw with this, was the beginning. The hero is estranged from his best friend. Both were geeks just a short time before, and what caused their friendship to end isn’t established, so when the geek friend starts talking about vampires and walking around with a knapsack full of stakes and stuff, it’s coming right out of left field. Also, the hero has the girl right away. Considering he was such a geek, it’s unclear what about him attracted her.

It’s little things like this that we have to look out for when creating our stories.


About Darke Conteur
Darke Conteur is a writer at the mercy of her Muse. The author of stories in several genres, she prefers to create within the realms Science Fiction and Dark Fantasy. A pagan at heart, her personal goal it to find her balance within nature; exploring the dark through her stories and the light through her beliefs. When not writing or working with crystals, she enjoys knitting, gardening, cooking and very loud music.

2 Responses to Distracting POV’s and Assumptions

  1. I know what you mean and plot is really difficult to nail down exactly right. What works for you doesn’t necessary work for the rest of the reading public. lol

    I wanted to see both movies but realized that they are more likely renters for me. Both seem like they would be good but not “that good”. Thanks for confirming my suspicions lol!

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