November 3, 2013 2 Comments
When I started writing decades ago, I found myself writing steamy scene into my stories. It felt natural for me to include them, but I was horrified when I was told these scene were too mechanical and stiff (no pun intended). Sad thing was, when I re-read it, I agreed. That’s when I decided maybe I should think seriously about getting it right.
Love scenes are supposed to flow seamlessly and envelope the reader in the passion the characters are feeling. We ebb and flow with their feelings; experiencing their highs and lows, but sometimes, for one reason or another, a story fails sweep us into ecstasy and we’re pulled from the arms of our characters by something like this;
“He began to massage her with a kind of dry pumping action, which reminded her of someone blowing up a lilo” [For the record, I have no idea what a lilo is]
“Her weasel-like loins clutching and unclutching his lovely, long, louche manhood, as though squeezing an orange for its juice…” [I’ve heard it called a lot of things, but a weasel?]
Did you note the page I found that on? The Bad Sex Awards. Seriously! Horribly written love scenes have become so rampant in they’re giving out AWARDS! There are even groups on places like Goodreads dedicated to cringe-worthy material.
Why is this happening? I found a site that helps to explain. As the author states, “Cringe worthy scenes almost always come from a writer that fumbles with words because of a basic misunderstanding about how sex scenes should be constructed, or those with a shame about writing what they are writing.”
I write erotic scenes now, not only because they need to be in there, but to prove that they can be done properly. I don’t claim to be good at it, I’m still learning, and I make a promise to you to NEVER write a cringe-worthy scene.